User blog comment:JoeySlikk/Is This Some Kind of A Joke?!/@comment-3495717-20140714173556

You need to work more on your sentence structure. A good start would be to stop repeating the same things you've just said at the end of a sentence. Why? That's what we call redundancy.

"I could hear a knock at the door, so I went to investigate because I heard a knock at the door." is your sentences in a nutshell. Your so-called creepypasta consisted of this so much, which is part of the reason as to why it was about as awful as Brazil's football team during their unfortunate run-in with Germany.